Here comes another flash fiction piece for DudeWrite’s “Flash Mob” monthly challenge.
Yet again, we have to write a maximum of 500 words. This month’s prompt is “When I saw it, I nearly cried…”
Let’s go:
When I saw it, I nearly cried. Until today I could scarcely believe they existed, but now…now we finally had undeniable proof.
The screen flickered and the picture became clearer.
The scanner was picking up multiple life forms. I could make out at least two, but I expected to know the exact count soon.
My heart was racing as I tried to wrap my head around the ramifications of this new reality. I had so many questions. Would they be friendly? How would they react when they finally got here? How would we communicate?
Unfortunately, the scanner could presently do little more than simply confirm their presence. Human technology wasn’t nearly advanced enough to identify much else. Most of my questions would have no answers for the time being. All that remained was to await their arrival and hope that, with time, their true nature would be revealed.
One thing, however, was certain: our lives as we knew them were over. We could no longer pretend we were alone. From now on every action, every step we made would have to be carefully considered, lest we upset the new arrivals. We’d have to strike a fine balance between teaching them our way of life and learning all that we could from them.
I glanced at the screen once more to make sure there was no mistake. There wasn’t. The screen showed the same, almost indistinguishable shapes. Each passing day they’d be getting closer and closer, larger and larger. I suddenly realised that I was almost imperceptibly trembling. No wonder!
Naturally, I was also scared. We’d never faced anything like this before. There was always a risk that they’d proceed to turn us into mindless slaves, catering to their every expectation. Who knew what weapons they had at their disposal that could bend us to their will? Telepathy? Psychological warfare? Sonic attacks? All of these were certainly possible!
I looked over at Alex’s face and saw a mask of trepidation and excitement. It was obvious I wasn’t the only one with these thoughts and concerns.
Were we truly prepared to face them? All of them?! I guess it didn’t matter at this point. We’d have to be.
My train of thought was interrupted by a cheerful female voice.
“Well, looks like you’re having triplets! Congratulations!” the nurse was still holding the transducer in her hand and pressing it against Alex’s belly. She pointed excitedly at the screen.
As she continued chirping about the upcoming months and the necessary procedures I stole another look at my wife. Alex no longer had any trace of worry on her face. She looked happy. At peace. She looked beautiful. Alex reached out, placed her hand over mine and smiled.
At that moment I knew that no matter what the future brought, we were going to be just fine.
Absolutely brilliant, Mr. Nest.
I had a feeling there might be a twist but you STILL totally took me surprised.
Great writing.
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Thanks man, it’s always fun writing twists, so I’m happy when I can pull it off. Glad you’ve enjoyed the piece!
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Great story. I am proud to say I sniffed it out before the end.
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Thanks Scott! And hey – congrats on your impressive detective skills!
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Witty! I like the element of surprise in bait-and-switch fiction like this one. Writing that makes me read and then re-read. =)
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Hey Ellen, thanks! I like writing twist-endings, so it works out quite well for the both of us it seems 🙂
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So naive and innocent…going to be just fine. Survival is likely. Everything just fine…no chance. Congrats!
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Ha, sounds like life-earned scepticism right there! 😀
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I have to say I like this one Daniel, I actually have mine ready to go but didn’t want to jump the gun so to say, it appears you have set the bar high my friend.
Well Done
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Thanks Jimmy, I appreciate it! Writing fiction’s really becoming fun for me lately.
Looking forward to your story too!
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Damn , you are a good writer! Great story! I will vote soon! 🙂
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Thank you! I’m really starting to enjoy the “fiction” side of things 🙂
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This took me by surprise by its seriousness-but I liked it! 🙂
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Found you through Dude Writes ~ this is brilliant! Not sure how to vote but would if I could.
Best ~ Sharon
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Hi Sharon. Thank you! I’m glad you’ve enjoyed the story!
Voting opens at the end of the month, since this is a monthly fiction competition – your vote then would be appreciated 🙂
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You are the master of trick endings! Excellent. But better Alex than me. I’ll pass on the triplets. 🙂
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Yeah I’d imagine you have your hands full with the offal-sharing teenagers as it is 😉 Thanks, glad you liked the twist!
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